雅思作文打分 最好能给点建议

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雅思作文打分 最好能给点建议
Improvements in health,education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations.However ,the governments of the richer nations should take more responsibility for help the poorer nations in such areas.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
As the globalization degree is increasingly,global village has became a proliferation concept.In this case,i hold the view ,rich country take more responsibility,not only to think for themselves,but also to promote the development countries substantially.
The poor nations health and trade are accompanied by the rich ones as a result of globalization.rich nations can not separately advance,in turn,poor nations are more reliable on rich nations.This point can be firmly confirmed with an example of SARS.Apparently,developed countries can not defend the world-spread disease with a neglect measure ,forbidding immigrants that period internationally.It is evident that helping the impoverishe

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