姐姐,在帮我修改下这篇考研小作文,受累

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姐姐,在帮我修改下这篇考研小作文,受累
Directions:our local museum is advertising exhibition that you are interested in going to see.write an email to the manager of the museum .Introduce yourself ,and ask for any relevant information.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am so glad to hear that your museum will have an exhibition next week.I am a senior history major from Beijng University.I have a particular interest in history since childhood.Therefore ,I would like to ask you some relevant informations about the activity.
First of all,could you tell me the specific time about this activity?Because I have classes from Monday to Friday .If you tell me the relevant time,I can make a necessary arrangement in advance.In addition,I wonder the activity mainly focus on which Dynasty exhibition in Chinese history.Lastly,Is there any preferential policies for students?
I look forward to your favorable reply at your earliest convenience.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
这是一篇模拟题,另外可能这个月会麻烦您次数多些,从下个月开始我打算

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Dear Sir or Madam,
I am so glad to hear that your museum will have an exhibition next week.I am a senior history major from Beijng University.I have had a particular interest in history since i was a child.Therefore ,I would like to ask you for some relevant information about the activity.
First of all,could you tell me the specific time about this activity?Because I have classes from Monday to Friday .If you are kind to give me the information,I can make a necessary arrangement in advance.In addition,I wonder which Dynasty in Chinese history the activity mainly focuses on .Lastly,Is there any preferential policies for students?
I am looking forward to your favorable reply at your earliest convenience.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
这篇文章写得比前几篇要好,而且之前写作里出现的那些固定词组和句式你也能用上来了,有进步.另外,我周末一般不能上网,若我不能及时给你回复,你可以参考别人给你的意见.