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ielts 评作文
准备考雅思了,写了篇作文,望高手指点一下有什么错误和不足的地方,还有这篇文章大概能拿多少分,
Air travel only brings advantages to the rich people.But the majority of people do not benefit from it.To what extent do you agree?
As the technology is developing at an staggering rate,the transportation for individuals to anywhere become more comfortable and less time-consuming,which should attribute to the innovation of aeroplane.However,some people assert that they believe air travel rarely brings benefits to the common people,but only take advantages to the wealthy people.In my opinion,I am not agree with them.
Some people hold their own opinion that air travel brings profits to the affluent individuals.For one thing,in the contemporary society,wealthy people often select the air transportation when they tend to go to the other countries or somewhere far from their home,while common people or impoverished people give up to choose air travel and take other typies of transport,because they are cheaper.For anot

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写得很好,只是有几个地方用的句子一样,感觉不太好