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帮忙点评一下文章（全面点,谢啦）,这文章能有个啥水平
What do we study for
It has always been a question for me what I have studied for?May be 50 years ago we would regard the answer of the question as a slogan"STUDY TO SERVE THE COUNTRY".But as the econormy and technology has developped so fast,most of the people have change their views.And maybe this time the opinion is going to another extreme side.I often hear many teenagers saying "I just do what I want to do.I study for myself".I'm against this kind of opinion (mentally the main idea among our after-90s).It is even doubtful if they really know what they are saying.
Why we must ,or we have to study so hard under too much pressure?----for leading a successful life,having a lot of money,being proud when you get good grade?Those kind of ideas are absolutely mistaken.A lot of you may say"being happy is enough",.Is that your whole life?I think the more important thing is that we can't let the people who have been taken care of us all the time down.And this is the so-called "THANKSGIVING",
Let us just make an imagination.How can you grown up happily till now without the bring-up from our parents,the knowledge our teachers have given to us or the help from our friends?It is obviously to say that without them,we are nothing.If there was nobody care about you,it would be pretty all right not to work hard,for what we do would lose their meaning.In fact,nobody is alone.There are always people looking at you.Can you plead any ignorance for them?Sure not.
Nor is a human without the need of accompany with others.Everybody should think more of others than himself.As a middle school student,we don't study for ourselves.We will never have any rights to let the people around us down.
So,my friends,everytime you are tired of study,think about your parents' eager eyes:everytime you don't want to finish your mission,think about your teachers and your friends.I believe we all can achieve our dreams.

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客观的说,真的不怎么样.表达不地道,很多都是非常明显的中式英语,并且有一些语法错误.可取的是词汇量还可以.
PS：只是个人意见.