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帮我看看这段话还有没有错 谢谢啦!~
Introduce myself
My name is ***. My English name is Candy. I have long black hair, and a pair of brown eyes. I like read books, draw pictures and dance. I like sports, every subject and too! Special in English. In my life, most hard time in my primary school graduate holiday. I went to skating rink learn skating. But I learn it too bed. Because I am not good at equipoise. Fall, again and again . Up, again and again. Again, fall, again up. Coach drop on, don’t be afraid. Trauma, don’t be afraid. My skating skills were accumulated in tumbles and tears.Get cross this thing, I know : if I have backbone , no matter what , I can do good. Why I choice software and hardware was very good Xi Cheng English junior school read in this school for three year? Because I know the west city foreign language school is a place to culture a student to develop completely of outstanding,in the meantime,three greatest special featureses of the mental education for all-round development, modern education, foreign language of the information technique educate are concentrated.High standard, have special features and open the overall education for all-round development of type make student's quality raise continuously. I believe that I will be trained very outstanding in your esteem school for the later three years.

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Introduce myself
My name is ***.My English name is Candy.I have long black hair,and a pair of brown eyes.I like read books,draw pictures and dance.I like sports,every subject and too!Special in English.In my life,most hard time in my primary school graduate holiday.I went to skating rink learn skating.But I learn it too bed.Because I am not good at equipoise.Fall,again and again .Up,again and again.Again,fall,again up.Coach drop on,don’t be afraid.Trauma,don’t be afraid.My skating skills were accumulated in tumbles and tears.Get cross this thing,I know:if I have backbone,no matter what,I can do good.Why I choice software and hardware was very good Xi Cheng English junior school read in this school for three year?Because I know the west city foreign language school is a place to culture a student to develop completely of outstanding,in the meantime,three greatest special featureless of the mental education for all-round development,modern education,foreign language of the information technique educate are concentrated.High standard,have special features and open the overall education for all-round development of type make student's quality raise continuously.I believe that I will be trained very outstanding in your esteem school for the later three years.
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