求高手改一下我刚写的一篇2009年6月的英语六级作文,

题目

求高手改一下我刚写的一篇2009年6月的英语六级作文,
09年6月的六级作文题是：
　　1有人认为名字很重要
　　2也有人认为无关紧要,
　　3我认为
The Inprotance Of a name
In recent years,the topic of the inportance of a name has aroused pervasive attention.As we all know,some people even turn to perfassional consult for a good name.While with the passage of time,defferent voices rise over whether should name divide into good or bad?
Some people hold the opinion that a good name deserves everything.For them,a good name not only influence their emotion,but also may lead to some unexpected rewards.Such as weathey,social status and promotion prospects.
On the contrary,other people take the opposing view that a good name is nothing.For one thing,names have long been set as a symbol of a person.What’s more,it can help us communicatae with each other conveniently..For another,only with a good name can our not enlarge our konwledge and develop our character.
In my point of view,there shouldn’t be a distinction between good nam

答案

是importance...professional.different..."While with the passage of time",这句话也有问题,表示“随着时光流逝”可以这样表达——As time goes by还有, whether should name divide into good or bad?有问题,应该...