帮忙为英语作文改错.

题目

帮忙为英语作文改错.
Okay,as you can see,I decide to set about writing some of my journal in English from this week.To be honest,it's really a big challenge for me with my recent English level.So now I have to check what I've just wrote after I wrote down every single sentense.Anyway I'm doing it now,it's the most important point,and definitely if you could mention it when I've made any mistake,it would be my pleature receiving that.
这段话有何不妥,或者有什么更好的表达方式.

答案

改动的地方用大写标出来了.
Okay,as you can see,I decide to set about writing some of my journalS in English from this week ON.To be honest,it's really a big challenge for me with my recent English level.So now I have to check every single sentense I've WRITTEN every single sentense.Anyway I'm doing it now.It's the most important point.And definitely if you could mention it when I MAKE any mistake,it would be my pleature TO RECEIVEE that.