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Come to Mr Cool’s Store!We sell pants for only ＄30.Do you like sweaters?We have sweaters in red green and white for only ＄15.We have bags in all colors at ＄2 each.Do you like shorts and hats?
We have beautiful shorts for only ＄6 and yellow hats for only ＄5.
That’s not all.Can you believe it?Come to Mr Cool’s store and have a look!
这是我写的英语作文,有没有语法错误或建议,尽管提!
有建议尽管提，或者有什么好句子也给我说说该用在哪

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Do you like sweaters?可以改成 would you like a new sweater that is of the latest cutting for this winter?(你想不想要在这个冬天有一件最新剪裁的毛衣）听起来不会比较生硬." We have sweaters in red green a...