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Nowadays,
an increasing number of coupleschoose to break up for some reasons,
leaving a single-parent family to theirchildren.While everyone has a
right to pursuit his/her own happiness,I feelsuch a thing is extremely
irresponsible for children.
First,although it is true
that decidingwhether or not have babies can solely be responsible for
mothers,it is clearthat both of mothers and fathers have a duty to
bring their children uptogether once they had decided to give birth to
babies.
Moreover,a father as well as a motherplays a
crucial role in children growing.Fathers are always heroes of boys
aswell as mothers are always best friends of girls.Surely,every member
of afamily is necessary to each other and is irreplaceable for a
complete unit.
On the other hand,a single-parent
familygenerally has kinds of problem for bringing the children up.It
most oftenbegun with a financial issue,then led to a

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先改语法错误：Nowadays,an increasing number of couples choose to break up for some reasons,leaving single-parent families(前文已经说了是很多couples,所以用复数) to their children.While everyone has the...