请高手批改一篇高中英语作文

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请高手批改一篇高中英语作文
Holy place in my mind
Do you have a favorite place?Maybe everyone will say “yes”.But the answer can be very different.If you ask me,I’d say “the museum” without doubt.In fact,it is more than the favorite; museum is a holy place in my mind.
I don’t remember when and where I went to a museum for the first time.But I surely know I fell in love with it since I was 9-year-old.I joined a chess club at that time and spent forenoon there every weekend.So in the afternoon,I went to museums with mom.They were about many different domains,such as astronomy,history,science and art.It was such a great feeling!
People said that museum was a good place to appreciate and relax.It really was.First of all,it is the quietest place beside the library.There is little people here everyday and people here must be gentle ones.Then,the cultural atmosphere makes people comfortable.I’m an admirer of the history of Egypt,so it’s particularly excited for me to go to the exhibition abo

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第一段In fact,it is more than the favorite; museum is a holy place in my mind.中的than应该删掉第二段But I surely know I fell in love with it since I was 9-year-old.应该将fell in love改为fall in love,...