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托福作文求批改啊,有木有高手帮帮忙啊!
怎么都没人回答的T T 第一次也独立作文,完全自学状态中,好像知道弱点在哪里!
题目是：It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
Friends are important companions in our lives. A true friendship can last as long as our whole lives no matter how old we are and where we go, while an instant friendship can change with fleeting time and different location. It is an undeniable fact that making new friends can get people refreshed and release them from isolation. However, when comes to the question that between keeping the old friends and making new friends, which one is of greater importance, I will absolutely choose the former, for primary two reasons that I will underline below.
The first reason that I would like to elaborate upon is that, by keeping old friends can we experience a life-long friendship based on our true affection, rather than the purpose of eliminating our loneliness. That’s why a lot of people still keep in touch with their elementary school c

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