雅思作文批改：最好能给个合理的分数,

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雅思作文批改：最好能给个合理的分数,
topic:Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old .Others believe that it is important for children to go to school as soon as possible.What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?
内容：
Currently ,more and more people prefer their children to attend school when they are pretty young .I ,indeed,do believe that there are a multitude of strengths to their physical and mental well—being .
First of all ,a vast number of great educational resources such as well—trained teachers and specialized facilities are offered within schools ,which may expend their outlook and gain knowledge more scientifically.Specifically,these teachers can motivate them to develop their interest and specialty and help them build self-esteem since young.Therefore,children not only relax their bodies and ease minds ,but also there will be a strong basement for learning in the future .M

答案

在hi上和你说的差不多了吧,都明白了吗