这句话有语病吗?是英语!

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这句话有语病吗?是英语!
Please don't keep me out.I just want to stay with you,even only a few minutes.But I don't know you anymore.
有的话,请指出,另外,可不可以使这3句话说得更精练,简洁一点...3Q

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语病基本没有最后一句But I don't know you anymore.个人觉得说成any further比较好3句说成简洁点的：I wanna be along with you and know more about you.Don't let me down.我想靠近你,了解你.别让我失望好么?...