求高手修改2011考研作文

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求高手修改2011考研作文
请高手帮我修改下,顺便给个分.
图画是在雪地上有一个赈灾捐款的箱子,箱子边上的雪都融化了
This is a warm and thought-provoking picture.As is shown in the cartoon,in the winter stands a donation box which have thawed the snow around it.It is obvious that the donation can bring people of the devastated zone not only material support but also inspiration.
We can deduce from the cartoon that the drawer wants to remind us to hold love minds forever.The disaters are terrible and unfortunate.They take away people"s wealth ,health and even life.However,there are numerious kind persons,They try their best to help the poor ,the disabled and its like.As a result,the people in trouble have power to pick up the pieces and have confidence and courage live on.
When I read the reports of donation,I feel so inspiring.One"s help is very tiny,but when it is added together,it shows the unimaginable power.Therefor,I strongly advocate that everybody give a hand to others.Only with love and contribution,I am sure ,woul

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通过看你的文章,大概明白了图片信息和你要说的内容,于是在你的作文基础上作了些改的,请查看.This is a warm and thought-provoking cartoon picture.From the picture,we can see that the snow around a donation b...