请帮我检查并修改一下这篇英语自我介绍的语法,马上要用了,十万火急~

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请帮我检查并修改一下这篇英语自我介绍的语法,马上要用了,十万火急~
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Good morning/afternoon,(ladies and gentlemen/ladies/sirs).I’m glad to meet you .
First,please let me introduce myself.My name is LiXiaoyin,You can call me Anna if you like.I’m an bright,confident girl from Yantai.It is really a great honor to have this opportunity for this interview.I hope I can make a good performance today.I’m 14 years old.I study in NO.2 middle school.I have many hobbies,like singing songs,drawing pictures,traveling and so on.
Traveling is the best activity which I really enjoy.I’ve travel a good time there.This summer,I was told that I can go to the prairie with my mother.I was very excited when I heard the news.In my mind,the sights on the prairie are crazy.Though the weather here is summer,it’s still spring there.Can you imagine that thousands of colorful flowers on the grassland?The clouds look like white sheep walking in the sky.What a fairyland there!And I’ve heard that the tea with milk there tastes g

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Good morning/afternoon,(ladies and gentlemen/ladies/sirs).I’m glad to meet you .
First,please let me introduce myself.My name is LiXiaoyin,You can call me Anna if you like.I’m an bright,confident girl from Yantai.I’m 14 years old,studying in NO.2 middle school.It is my great honor to have this opportunity for this interview.I hope I can make a good performance today.
I have many hobbies,such as singing,drawing,traveling and so on.
I really enjoy traveling,which I think is the best sport in the world.I have traveled a great number of places.This summer,I went to the prairie with my mother.I was very excited when I heard the news.In my mind,the sights on the prairie are fascinating.When the weather in Yantai is hot,prairie still stays in spring.Can you imagine thousands of colorful flowers on the grassland?The clouds look like white sheep walking in the sky.What a fairyland!And the tea with milk is great tasty.There isn’t any porker on the prairie,so the people there only eat beef.To many fantastic places,I think Guilin is the most beautiful one.It’s a good place to live.The environment is clean.The rivers look clear and the mountains are very tall.The water in Guilin is so pure that you can drink it with out boiling.Many tourists have to bring a lot of snacks because they don’t like to eat mutton or beef.Maybe I don’t need to worry about food,because I like beef,and mutton is also OK for me.I’m dreaming about my vacation on the prairie these days.
That’s all,thank you.姑娘,我尽力了……