大家来看看我的英语简介有什么语法不对的,

题目

大家来看看我的英语简介有什么语法不对的,
Dear teacher,
My name is Li Hang.I am fifteen years old.I am a lively boy.I come from Shang Qiu,He Nan province.
There are many places of interest in Shang Qiu,I was the most impressed is Days of Longhu.I have many hobbies.In primary school,I was the volleyball team captain.In middle school,I began to love playing basketball and billiards.When I feel unhappy,I am going to play sports.
Sometimes,I get a lot of pressure,I will go to the amusement park.
Music is my favourite.When I was free,I listen music,too.
I love many singer.For example,Backstreet Boys’《I want it that way》I like best
When I traved in Shang Hai,I think is a beautiful city.I went to The World Expo China Pavilion.It very special,and describes the rich Chinese culture.
Shanghai Oriental Pearl TV Tower ,Walking along the beach ,It is 468 m high.I can see it,eveywhere.
Shanghai gave me a deep impression .

答案

He Nan应写作Henan;I was the most impressed is Days of Longhu应该是What impresses me most is Longhu;When I feel unhappy,I am going to play sports应该改为When I felt unhappy,I went to play sports;I will go to the amusement park中的will去掉；When I was free中was改为am;I listen music改为I listen to music; I love many singer中singer应为singers;Backstreet Boys’《I want it that way》I like best 改为I like Backstreet Boys’《I want it that way》 best ;I think is a beautiful city中is改为it's;It very special中it改为it is;Shanghai Oriental Pearl TV Tower ,Walking along the beach ,It is 468 m high.I can see it,eveywhere.改为I walked along the beach and saw Shanghai Oriental Pearl TV Tower,it is 468 metres high;最后一句gave改为give更好