Nowadays it has become fashionable for college students to take a part-time job in their spare time.

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Nowadays it has become fashionable for college students to take a part-time job in their spare time.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend
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Take a part-time job
In this time,more and more college students are likely to take a part-time job in their spare time,this circumstance are becoming porpular.Whereas,some people state that these action can not to be encouraged while others said it is good at to students.In this essay,we will talk about the merit and shortcoming of this trend.
On one hand,we can not ignore the fact that to take a part-time job,students will have more opportunities to built up their ability of practice.These work can teach them some parts of knowledge which they can not get it from books.Besides,we can learn some working experience which is useful for us when we graduate from school,it can help us to be more confidence when we find a job.What is more,they can earn some money by themselves,in some extent,it can help students

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