bec高级大作文求批改

题目

bec高级大作文求批改
如题~
Performance of the car company you are in is not good recently because of several reasons.The Managing Director has asked you to write a report about how to solve these problems.
Tell your boss in which way you found these problems.
Explaining the reasons why these problems occurred.
Supplying your proposal to solve the issues.
Report on current situation
Introduction
The purpose of this report is to analyse the problems we have faced and to give recommendations to solve them.
Findings
As we all know,we have failed to achieve the target which was set in the earlier time.Even worse,the whole sales volume of May was much lower than that of April.After a thorough investigation carried out by our marking department,I found several reasons for the problems.
The reasons can be boiled down to the following:Firstly,we have launched a series of advertising campaigns in April and the result was far from satisfaction.Secondly,a new rival

答案

这是一篇论证很到位,用词比较规范的文章.值得一赞!下面提些小意见：首先是语法上：Firstly,we have launched a series of advertising campaigns in April and the result was far from satisfaction.这句话的连词an...