雅思作文帮忙修改打分

题目

雅思作文帮忙修改打分
Some people think earlier technology changed our lives more than recent technology. Do you agree or disagree?
Technology is playing an imperative role in our lives which promotes the development of society. Colourful life in present age benefit from sustainable technology and earlier innovations really made our lives had more signifigent changes than recent innovations.
Acient society, people had no vehicles and only on foot,had boring leisure activities and with no electrical equipment until the earlier technology sprangout, take computers for example, modern life cannot live without computers. Prevalent computers make people more convenient, which cause us do almost everything at home. Earlier technology improved essential life in terms of food, clothing, housing and transportation and changed backward life into a new age. By contrast, new technology is too advanced and cost too much money that average families can not afford it. Most hi-tech are invented for s

答案

1.拼错的单词：Acient society(ancient),sprangout (sprang out),signifigent changes (significant),Eavlier(earlier) technology,are satisfield (satisfied)by people
2.句法：个人感觉句子没有必要写那么长.句子太长的话反而容易出错.另外还要注意下表达方式.Colourful life in present age benefit from sustainable technology and earlier innovations really made our lives had more signifigent changes than recent innovations.
in present age 改成“nowadays”,"made our lives had more signifigent changes " 改成“brought more significant changes than”
3.格式：雅思作文最好写成“introduction-body-conclusion”,
4.总体感觉这篇作文在6分左右.