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in the DVD' Baby'
do you believe that communication skills' are important for a succeesful
personal ,social and work life ?
+ summarize the DVD and what you felt was important ?


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I do believe that communication skills are important for a successful personal,social and working life.In the film ‘’Baby’’,four babies apply different actions to communicate with their parents,they express their feelings by actions in order to get their parents’ attentions.
A baby’s communication skill is different from grownups like us,a baby can only apply actions to communicate,but we can use different types of languages,for example,we may use body language to communicate with others.However,in order to achieve personal success,it’s very important to have good communication skills to talk and socialize with others so as to build good relationships with them.
In the DVD ’’Baby’’ ,it shows us a lot about babies’ behaviors and reactions in their daily lives.The four babies are from different parts of the world,they all have different behaviors which reflect their varied aspects of culture and tradition.For example,the U.S.and Japanese babies represent the modern,urbanized and educated aspects of develoed countries.As for the Mongolian and Namibian babies,they both represent the aspect of nomadic herding cultures.The four baby cases all have similar stages of development,they learn to crawl,walk and talk,but they all have different responses in their growth..
After watching the film,I think it’s very important to provide a good environment for our children.As we can see,in the film,the Namibian babies crawl and frolic in the dirt,putting whatever they can find into their mouths which are very unhealthy and unsanitary..Also,they don’t have a good environment to learn knowledge; they learn only from their mothers,no teachers or educators are available to help them,because they live in a village which is faraway from the city,and they have no money to move to the city.So it’s very important to provide good resources and good learning environment for children to learn and play during their growing up.There is something we can learn from the film,we can find special ways to help babies learn and grow,may it be in a hot tub or in a water trough for goats.