大家帮我修改一下这篇关于春节的英语作文

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大家帮我修改一下这篇关于春节的英语作文
文章里有一些错误,但不知道怎么改,还希望大家指正.
还有哪些不足,或者可以提高的问题也希望大家教导.
People usually celebrate many traditional festivals,such as Dragon Boat Festival,Mid-autumn Festival,Lantern Festival and so on.In these festivals,the Spring Festival is still a big event.
People start preparing for the festival a month before.They prepare food,clean and decorate their houses.On the eve of the festival,the whole family get together for a big dinner.People stay up to eat dumplings at midnight for good luck and health.Since China’s reform and opening-up in 1978,our life is getting richer and richer.Some of families begin to choose those traditional restaurants to enjoy their family reunion dinner.Since 1984,the soirees who are CCTV’s is also becoming one of essential elements.
After the first lunar month third day,people go to the temple fairs with their family.Temple fairs are one of traditional activities,too.We cannot only make funny games,eat delicious snacks,bur even if buy so

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【Comment】Writing is a very effective approach for language learning.In general,your essay is a successful one,involving some complex sentence structure and special usages.You need to pay special attention to some wording,conciseness and coherence,however.(using ‘as well,also,nevertheless,however,in addition,etc.’) If you can recite some excellent essays,you will find it easier to accomplish one.The following are some alternations for reference.(Considering your level of English,no Chinese is used here.)
【Para1】People ….In these festivals,the Spring Festival is still a big event.→Among these … is especially a big event.
【Para2】People start preparing for the festival a month before.→ … a month in advance.
They prepare food,clean and decorate their houses.On the eve of the festival,the whole family get together for a big dinner.→ … family would have a big get-together dinner.
People stay up to eat dumplings at midnight for good luck and health.Since China’s reform and opening-up in 1978,our life is getting richer and richer.→ … life is getting better and better.(note:a person can get ‘richer’; his life can get ‘better’.)
Some of families begin to choose those traditional restaurants to enjoy their family reunion dinner.→ Some families …
Since 1984,the soirees who are CCTV’s is also becoming one of essential elements.→ … CCTV Spring Festival Evening Gala has become …
【Para3】After the first lunar month third day,people go to the temple fairs with their family.→ …the third day of the first lunar month…
Temple fairs are one of traditional activities,too.→ … the traditional …
We cannot only make funny games,eat delicious snacks,bur even if buy some interesting joys.→ We can not only play funny games and eat delicious snacks,but (also) can we buy some interesting toys(?).
【Para4】In all of Chinese mind,firecracker is a must.→ In all Chinese minds,…
Because the Spring Festival has celebrated for 15days,therefore,in this period,people set off firecrackers.→ The Spring Festival is to be celebrated for 15 days,during which period,people …
Its implication firecrackers may drive away the receding year’s bad luck,to one year pray newly.→ Setting off firecrackers may,according to many Chinese,drive away the bad luck from the receding year,and welcome a promising new year.
【Para5】Although the local customs are dissimilar,people pray to new one year are similar.→…people’s prayers for the new year are similar.
【后记】Welcome to my “知道” with further suggestions or questions.