个人简历－英语问题!

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个人简历－英语问题!
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I once have traveled to Hong Kong, deeply in love with the city Hong Kong.
Hong Kong is an open international city, and the University of Hong Kong is the best university in Hong Kong. I choose the University of Hong Kong, because the University of Hong Kong uses international education concepts and advanced methods of management, it is consistent with my concepts in my heart and will be to benefit me greatly in the future.
I would like to engage in economic and financial professional. Under the environment of international financial crisis, engaging in the profession maybe have a certain degree of risk, but I am confident that through my efforts I can make a difference and own myself achievement enterprise space.
I am always excellent both in character and scholarship , with the outstanding behaviour in school, so I serve as one of the class leaders for a long time, and repeatedly have been rated as outstanding class cadres, Miyoshi students and e

答案

问题不少.今天没什么时间了,明天帮你看看吧.
作为简历,这个更像Cover letter,初看了下觉得没有很明确的表达你的优势.另有些语法错误