请问这篇高三英语作文估计能得多少分啊?谢谢（满分30）

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请问这篇高三英语作文估计能得多少分啊?谢谢（满分30）
最近,某中学生英文报开设了―After-class Activities‖的栏目,请你根据以下提示,为该栏目写一篇英文稿件,并鼓励同学们积极参加课外活动.
你校开展课外活动的情况；
2.你参加过的课外活动及给你带来的益处
3.为同学选择课外活动提出建议
4.为学校开展课外活动提出建议
注意：
词数100左右；
2.文中不得提及人名、校名及地名‗
3.稿件的开头以为你写好（不计入总词数）
After-class Activities Nowadays,after-class activities are becoming more and more popular in high schools.
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so,our high school have a great regard for After-class Activities .at present,After-class Activities is being set（我脑袋一秀逗把set写成setted交上去了,然后就想起来了） in our schol,and our teachers are focusing their attention* on it.
the reason why i want to suggest everybody joining After-class Activities is that it is just the After-class Activities that i have learned some life experience from,so i think it is necessary that everybody should join After-class Activities .
next,some suggestion i want to tell everybody is that you should choose* a Activities that you are interested with.
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答案

参加活动应该是join in,suggestion是可数名词,你用的是some,很明显建议应该用复数,a后面应该是加单数可数名词吧,你用的复数,be interested in是固定搭配,你用的with,我总觉得你的wish后面的虚拟语气用的不是很好.再...