please corrot and enrich it(4)

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please corrot and enrich it(4)
I was glad that I frist opened the blog to communicate with all people and use english expessing my ideas.What is more,In internet many strange friends help me revise my article so that I belived I could improve my english levels quickly.This afternoon,I purchased the book on social psychology,writen by David.It is very difficult for meto read it because I always come across so many new words that I had to look up the ditionary all the time.He was very overawed by his great knowledge.In his article,he analysed the current events and caused to my thinkings for example:After 9/11,most peaple fear flying more than driving,and many will drive great distances to avoid risking the skiers.Actually,we're about three dozen times safer in a commerial plane than in a motor vehicle.Although I took two hours to read 4 pages,yet I insisted on reading it.

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I am very happy when I can communicate with peoples and express my feeling in English through Blog for the first time.What's more ,people who I don't know from the internet will help me to correct my article,I believe in that by doing so ,my English will improve soon.
This afternoon,I read a book on social psychology,writen by David.It's hard for me to read,because I met the new words so often that I need to look up the dictionary all the time.I was attracted by his erudite knowledge.
He analysed the events happened currently which caused me to think about them.
For example,after 911,many people afraid to take plane and prefer to car.They prefer to drive for a long long distance to avoid the possibility of skiers.In fact,the safe rate of commerial plane is 3 dozens times higher than the motor verhicle .
Although I just read 4 pages in 2 hours,I will insist to read through the book.