我写的雅思大作文,

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我写的雅思大作文,
我的目标是G类作文7分.这次写完一看表,47分钟,时间用的太长了,的逐步压缩时间.作为如下：
Who should be more responsible for children's education,the school or the parents?
Recently,the issue of children education has been brought into public focus.People's opinion varies dramatically on these topics,such as who,the school or the parents,should bear more responsibility for children's education.It is reaonable to analyse two opposite views before reaching the final conclusion.
There are many sound reasons to those who claim that school should be more responsible for children's education.Firstly,compared with children's parents,school has more professional education facilities and equipments and teachers are usually experts on the fields such as early children education and children psychology etc,thus it is eailer for the teachers providing high quality of education.They can make much more effect communication with children and resolve children's problems skillfully.
On the other hand,the opponents also are persuasive.To begin with,the parents are ,according to widely-accepted opinion,the closest friend and the only teacher before their children are sent to kindergarten or school,thus what the parents taught in this period plays a decisive role in children's future development.Moreover,parents,unlike the teachers,are able to concentrate their mind on their own children and in school,on the other hand,children's special needs on education are usually neglected because teachers have to take care of too many children.Therefore,the parents understand their own kids much deeper than the teachers and the parents are capable of catering children's special needs and feature on education.
Admittedly,two opinions respectively provide only only parts of the real answer to his question.In fact,children's education requires cooperation between teachers and parents,and only one party being involved in children's education would finally brought negative effect on children.

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1.有点中式英语的句子构成.开始在People's opinion varies dramatically on these topics,such as who,the school or the parents,should bear more responsibility for children's education.这句里面就体现出来了,...