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I love Travelling
I’m passionate about traveling..When I was a child,my dad used to take me outside and that let me fall in love with travelling..
In the journey,I can not only enjoy visiting many wonderful scenery,but also can meet different people as well.We share our dream,story and experience.In this way,I can know more about the world.Also I make so many new friends during the journey.
What’s more,I can’t bear to stay at the same place,doing the same thing everyday.This kind of life makes me sick and bored.Only in the journey,can I feel life is great.
However,travelling is wonderful,but the end of a journey always makes me sad.Every time when I say goodbye to the friends who travel with me,I can’t stop to cry,because we have so many good time together and I don’t want to be apart.
Anyway,travel around the world is my dream.I won’t stop it!

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that let me fall in love with travelling 改成 that made me fall in love with travelling
I can not only enjoy visiting many wonderful scenery 改成 I can not only enjoy visiting many wonderful sceneries.
Also I make so many new friends during the journey. 改成 Also I can make so many new friends during the journey. 这样时态上才较为统一.
However, travelling is wonderful, but the end of a journey always makes me sad. 改为 Travelling is wonderful, but the end of a journey always makes me sad. 即去掉However,因为它与but意思重复.
Every time when I say goodbye to the friends who travel with me, 改为 Every time when I say goodbye to the friends who travelled/have travelled with me, 时态不正确
I can’t stop to cry 改为 I can’t stop crying 意思是”禁不住落泪“
because we have so many good time together and I don’t want to be apart. 改为 because we have had so many good time together and we don’t want to be apart. 时态问题和人称问题.
travel around the world is my dream 改为 travelling around the world is my dream 主语从句