帮我看一下我写的这篇英语作文写的对不对!

题目

帮我看一下我写的这篇英语作文写的对不对!
Hello!Look at Harry's family tree.Harry's grandfather is John King and Harry's grandmother is Lingda King.Look!Harry's father is Bill King and Harry's mother is Amy King.Harry's uncle is Tom king and Harry's aunt is Betty King.Oh!Harry has a sister,Cathy King.Harry has a happy family.

答案

你也上初一吧,和我一样.harry's 用得太多了,有点重复,有些可以用her.我帮你改了一下：Hello!Look at Harry's family tree.Harry's grandfather is John King and grandmother is Lingda King.Look!Her father is Bil...