能不能用英文为下面文章写一篇评论或者是感想,100字以上,

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能不能用英文为下面文章写一篇评论或者是感想,100字以上,
The life I desired
我所追求的生活
That must be the story of innumerable couples,and the pattern of lifeof life it offers has a homely grace.It reminds you of a placid rivulet,meandering smoohtly through green pastures and shaded by pleasant trees,till at last it falls into the vasty sea;but the sea is so calm,so silent,so infifferent,that you are troubled suddently by a vague uneasiness.Perhaps it is only by a kink in my nature,strong in me even in those days,that i felt in such an existence,the share of the great majority,something amiss.I recognized its social value.I saw its ordered happiness,but a fever in my blood asked for a wilder course.There seemed to me something alarming in such easy delights.In my heart was desire to live more dangerously.I was not unprepared for jagged rocks and treacherous,shoals it I could only have change-change and the exicitement of unforeseen.
这一定是世间无数对夫妻的生活写照,这种生活模式给人一种天伦之美.它使人想起一条平静的溪流,蜿蜒畅游过绿茵的草场,浓荫遮蔽,最后注入烟波浩渺的汪洋大海；但是大海太过平静,太过沉默,太过不动声色,你会突然感到莫名的不安.也许这只是我自己的一种怪诞想法,在那样的时代,这想法对我影响很深：我觉得这像大多数人一样的生活,似乎欠缺了一点儿什么.我承认这种生活有社会价值,我也看到了它那井然有序的幸福,但我血液里的冲动却渴望一种更桀骜不驯的旅程．这样的安逸中好像有一种叫我惊惧不安的东西．我的心渴望一种更加惊险的生活.只要生活中还能有变迁———以及不可知的刺激,我愿意踏上怪石嶙峋的山崖,奔赴暗礁满布的海滩.

答案

this must be the life of lots of couple, this kind of life just gives people a beautiful vibe. it makes people think about a calm and peaceful stream, flowing through the green meadow and into the deep blue sea. maybe the sea's abit too calm too peaceful. it gives me a bit of anxiety .
when you are writing in english, use your heart, NOT a damn dictionary, i cant even understand what you are saying,
maybe its just because u are too clever, but this writing is suppose to be beautiful, not a report, use subtle words , not big long complicated ones
your writing is actually quite hard to transulate, sorry didnt finish it.