关爱他人 英语作文

题目

关爱他人 英语作文
我写了一篇,
In the past,there was aperson,he was Lei feng.He always helped other people to do some difficult things.I think he was a hero.Nowadays,people don't help others.When an old lady falls over herself,nobody to help her.Why do people do this?Because someone think the person helps the old lady because he or she makes the old lady fall.Then,the old lady's relatives will ask the person who helps the old lady some money.Sometimes,the old lady will tell them he or she is not making her fall.But always the old lady is being hurt ,she can't tell others something.Nobody wants to be like that.But we need to be more care of people,otherwise when we have to do some difficult things,nobody will help us.
Let's to be more care of people!
有语法错误或用词不当的地方,要是有其他文章,题目是“More care of others”
就是我写的有些阴暗了，帮忙改的关爱他人多一点 去掉一点也可以的，大概这样就行了

答案

第二行 I think he was a hero.改为 I think he is a hero.
第三行 nobody to help her.改为 nobody wants to help her.
第四行 someone think the person helps the old lady because he or she makes the old lady fall.改为 someone think the person who helps the old lady makes the old lady fall.
第五行 Then,the old lady's relatives will ask the person who helps the old lady some money.改为 Then,the old lady's relatives will ask the person who helps the old lady for some money.
第七行 she can't tell others something 改为 she can't tell others anything
个人认为有些地方衔接不够好,我这里只改你语法错误,自己再看看吧.打得这么辛苦,多给点分吧.