帮我修改一下这篇英语作文.

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帮我修改一下这篇英语作文.
Be Myself
Hello! Everyone! I'm glad to meet you here! My name is Chen Kaiyan. And My English name is Melody. I was born on April 24th, 1996.I am a girl, who is 13 years old, studying in Jiangmen No.2 Middle School of Junior 2. At weekend, I also like to go shopping, listen to music or play computer games at home. About my study, my favourite subject is English. Learning English is very important and very funny for me, so I like it very much! And my idol is Super Junior. I like Korean cultures very much, too. Also, I'm looking forward to travel to South Korea.
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Form the time I was little, I knew I was great, because the people would tell me. “ You are so great.” But they never tell me how great I would be if ever someone who was greater than me.
When I grow up, I begin to understand it is the best to do myself. Try my best to complete my power thing. Just be myself. I like to be myself, because it is the most natural, the most true .In the process of growing up, always meet failure, but I won't give up, be myself is the most important.
Every one has dream besides me. But I want to be myself.
Thank you.
帮我看看有没有语法错误，句式对不对，要快哦，谢谢。

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I also like to go shopping,-->去掉also,这是你第一次说自己喜欢什么Learning English is very important and very funny for me-->..and such a fun to me（funny更倾向于好笑,滑稽.介词用to）Also,I'm looking fo...