英语作文（月考作文,帮我看看错哪?

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英语作文（月考作文,帮我看看错哪?
概括就不写了,
This is a impressive article.It teachers us to learn to be responsibility.It is very important to us.first,we can gain many precious thing if we have a responsibility .second,we can be popular with a responsibility.and then ,if you want to success ,keep being responsibility.
AS students ,our duty is not only Finnish our homework but also to learn to love your teacher and your friends .besides ,we must study for our county and our future .our county needs us ,we have a responsibility to build it .
In short,the world get better if everyone has a responsibility .

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it teachers改为it teaches.teach才是动词responsibility改为responsible,表语应该用形容词.many precious thing应该改为things,many后接可数名词复数.if you want to sucess改为suceed.keep being responsibility中...