英语翻译

题目

英语翻译
在场的每个人顿时变了脸色,大家都被突然传来的噩耗给震住了.
“天哪,怎么会这样?” 在旁的护士苍白着脸,声音有些颤抖地说道,“前几天她才刚刚出院阿!”
“你认识她?” 微胖的中年警官质疑地问道.
“是的,她是我们这儿的病人,因为前几个星期她家里出了火灾被烧伤,所以来我们这儿静养,前天刚刚出院.” 医院长解释道.

答案

Everyone present was shocked by the horrible news; the color on their faces changed immediately.
"Lord,how did this happen?!" The nurse aside asked in a shaking voice,with her face paler than a sheet of paper."She was just out of hospital a few days ago!"
"Do you know her?" The fat middle-aged sheriff asked curiously.
"Yes,she was our patient.She was convalescing and recuperating here because of a fire at her home a few weeks back.She moved out just the day before yesterday." The head of hospital explained.
第一个回答是机器译的,很明显不尊崇语法.第二个回答是直译的,但标点符号使用不当,有语法上错误的不断句的现象,而且全文上下时态不统一.本人是意译的,你看是否合适?