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“The House on Mango Street” is a narrative by Sandra Cisneros; tells Esperanza who is under a shameful economical situation.Some crucial symbolic structure that characterize in the story is the powerful house.“They always told us that one day we would move in to a house,a real house that would be ours for always so we wouldn’t have to move each year” (Cisneros 5).Esperanza wants a actual house because for her,a house represent everything that she does not have such as stability,warmth,success,and among others.Because of their poverties,Esperanza struggles by herself and she decides to get a real house,a house that she could point to.Another important symbol of the story is the comparison of hairs; she thinks her mother’s hair is beautiful and special.“My mother’s hair,like little rosettes,like little candy circles all curly and pretty because she pinned it in pin curls all day,sweet to put your nose into when she is holding you.In her personal perceptive feeling,mothe

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最后Finally these symbols are totally showed Esperanza’s dreams and thinking; the house and her mother’s hair imply the meaning of family
改成Finally these symbols have totally shown Esperanza’s dreams and thinking; the house and her mother’s hair implied the meaning of a family