请朋友们帮我修改一篇英语作文

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请朋友们帮我修改一篇英语作文
请写清错在什么地方,如何修改,怎样表达更好.
Women hold up half the sky
Do women hold up half the sky?Decades ago ,many people will give you a negative answer ,including me.But today ,I think most of us will say “yes”.
There has been such a big change for the last century .When all of the change has not happen,in most people’s mind,including women themselves,believe that it is the duty of women to stay home.Women’s work is to do the housework ,look after babies and prepare tasteful food for their husband who work outside for the whole family.In that days ,few women work outside.They do just what is said in the paragraph.
Nowadays ,few people consider that there is really a big difference between man and woman which is not changeable .The society is developing rapidly,more and more housework can be done by machines and plenty of suitable work for women came out .Women can find a satisfied job in almost every field.There’s no surprise it that you find your officer is a femal

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第一行 will 改成 would a 改成the
第三行 for the改成since 去掉all of
第四行 happen加ed
第五行 stay后面加at
第六行 husband加s
第七行 days改成age
第十行 came改成come
十一行 改成there is no need to suprise when you …… after you graduate
十四行 that改成it or改成and
十五行 for改成on