my home作文

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my home作文
My home is large clean and beatuful.Fisrt,I talking about my living room.Open the door,you can see the white sofa in the middle of the livingroom.The sofa is very pliancy、newness,you know,This seat is more comfortable to sit on..
If i was the tired or I was the sick,i must liv down the sofa is rest.There is a television in the front of sofa,I think you ask me the television is brand?it’s from america.There is bookcase on the left of the TV.there are some books magazines newspapers and there flower on the bookcase.the flower is artificial,but very verisimilitude.There are green carpet on the floor,the carpet look like a grassplot it’s very entertaining There are some blue paper on the wall.The Blue paper and green carpet is look like a picture.Whatwhere,I love my home and my parents so much!Although this sentence is out!but,I believe everbody love self home!
Last,bless my classmate so happy everyday
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第一行：large后加逗号；fisrt写错了,应为first,这句话语法有错,可写为：I‘d like to talk about my livingroom.Opening the door 第二行：very后应加形容词另,pliancy是柔顺的意思,此举可改为 is very soft and new 第四行,由于这个是真实条件句,可写为if i am tired or sick,i can sit in the sofa to have a rest 第五行：i think you may ask me the television's brand 第六行：there are some flowers on the .第七行：there is a green carpet.the carpet looks like 第八行：there are some green pieces of paper.the blue paper and green carpet look like a picture.Wharever第十行：去掉but(but 和although不能连用）最后一行：bless my classmates be happy everyday