我写了一篇英语作文,

题目

我写了一篇英语作文,
Group Work in the English Class
Everyone in his English class must be have group work.I like my group work.Because it can help me learn English better.We can save time to deal with a lot of questions.Peter and Linda are my classmates.I want to tell them some suggestions.If we think over our ideas,we will be much better.Someone in our group was in difficulty,we must try our best to help him.I do belive ‘where there's a will,there's a way.’I look forward to our English group will be more successful.

答案

1.Everyone in his English class must have group work.
去掉be 不需要被动
2.I like my group work,because it can help me learn English better.
because 打头字母小写 中间用逗号 因为前后是一句话 不是两句
3.I am looking forward that our English group would be more successful.
am looking 进行时态表示持续期盼的心情
that 之后引出的是一句完整的句子 that作为引导词引出从句 所以不用to
would委婉的说法 用来表达希望的心情
4.I would like to tell them some suggestions that if we think over our ideas,we will be much better.
that 后是跟的是前面的单词suggestions的同位语从句 也就是对建议的内容说明了一下
写成一个复合句 文章比较流畅 有衔接性
5.上下文加些适当的衔接词 不然好像是一堆句子流水账
改的也许有点难 不知道能不能理解
Everyone in his English class must have group work.I like my group work,because it can help me learn English better.And we can save time to deal with a lot of questions.I knew Peter and Linda in the class,they are my classmates.I would like to tell them some suggestions that if we think over our ideas,we will be much better.Sometimes one of us in our group is in difficulty,at this moment we must try our best to help him or her.I do belive ‘where there's a will,there's a way.’I am looking forward that our English group would be more successful.