麻烦英语高手帮修改一下这篇文章~急用,

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麻烦英语高手帮修改一下这篇文章~急用,
呃,一篇演讲稿,怕有语法错误,感激不尽!
（如果有较大改动,麻烦发上来.不过文章篇幅要在1分45秒以内）
The Spring Festival is celebrated by Chinese once a year,the exact date varying according to the lunar calendar,but always falling between mid January and mid February.The Spring Festival is one of the most important traditional festivals for Chinese people.The festival originated from the activities of offering sacrifices to gods or ancestors at the end of the year in the Yin and Shang dynasties.Chinese today celebrate the Chinese New Year with family gatherings and dinners.The most important dinner is the traditional Chinese New Year eve dinner where a feast of delicacies are prepared and eaten.Houses are cleaned for the event and red trimmings are placed on doorways and windows.Red packets filled with money are given by elders to unmarried children and adults during the 15 day celebration and are supposed to bring luck.Families will visit their relatives and friends,bringing greetings from place to

答案

The Spring Festival is celebrated by the Chinese once a year.
The Spring Festival is one of the most important traditional festivals for Chinese people. The most important meal is the traditional Chinese New Year eve dinner,when a feast is offered and shared.
Houses are cleaned for the event and red trimmings are placed on doorways and windows. Families visit their relatives and friends,bringing greetings from place to place；
The spring festival indicates reunion and the start of a new page for the Chinese,just as the importance of Christmas to western people.
用标记的是我改动较大的句子,原文有的地方可能写得不够好、句式过于单一、意思重复我也改了,然后给你的文章重新分了段.因为我不知道你的语速有多快,所以建议你试试看在规定时间里能不能完成,不过我觉得是有些长了,建议你在习俗部分可以适当删减.我也参加过不少演讲比赛,顺便给你提些建议：
1.句式要简洁,但不要简单.太长的句子不但在演讲时生硬而且不易理解
2.停顿一定要恰当,这样才能让听的人好理解
3.要突出重点,语气有缓有平.