帮忙点评下我的作文,全国英语创新大赛的.

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帮忙点评下我的作文,全国英语创新大赛的.
知道自己作文不怎么样,
100分无法表达我的心意……
Value of Exams in Schools
Direction:Students have experienced a lot of exams all through their school years.They may have a lot to say about the present exam systems.You are allowed 60 minutes to write a composition on the topic:Value of Exams in Schools.You should write about 300 words,and base your composition on the following outline.
Role of exams
Your experience of failure at one exam
Suggestions to better exam systems
= =我知道我写超了,400多字儿..用了55分钟的样子?
以下是作文：
Something about exams
We students ,especially in many Oriental country ,face great pressure for exams .It seems that the only standard to measure our acdemic achievments is the result of exams.Not only do teachers appraise one’s ability by exams ,but also parents .As a concequence,many of us regard exams as the most important things in our present life.
Is exams necessary?The answer is yes .The current education situation – a great num

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我竟然帮你订正了orz,不过作文起码没离题吧?你确定是一样的作文?我不确定他们怎么评的,不过貌似有很多的用错词之类的,去看下我订正的那些吧（不确定是100％对）题目的要求你都有了,应该不会是很低的分数,还有别担心,...