帮我看看哪里错了~然后改个高级句型,

题目

帮我看看哪里错了~然后改个高级句型,
a little girl fall down in the floor while a boy want to help her up,but at last he was stopped by his mother,what made the boy felt very angry with his mother
我是写书面表达要用,请改的符合一个高中生水平,我总觉的哪写错了很多..
反正我想表达的意识就这些,做为一个中国人,你们勉强看着些吧~好象有点中国式英语,呵呵~

答案

a little girl FELL down TO the floor ,a boy wanted to help her GET up,but at THE END he was stopped by his mother,WHICH made the boy FEEL very angry with his mother