帮我改下我的作文好吗 语法等方面

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帮我改下我的作文好吗 语法等方面
My holiday
My holiday was not very good.Before my holiday I was going to study very hard in holiday.But I’m failed.First one week,I read a lot of book,but not the book I study now.I wanted to read many English books,but failed,too.After my hardworking one week,I became very lazy,I couldn’t wake up early.I must finish my homework,but I don’t know where to start.So I became a failure.But I didn’t want me to become a sheer lazy born,so I promised that I will make myself thin.I ate a little everyday .I hate make exercise so I didn’t do it,but I’m succeed.I really became thinner than before.It’s my happiest thing in my holiday.I have a sister,in my holiday she played with me in Ming Cheng.We both wanted to watch TV very much.But it’s became a hard problem.My grandfather was watching TV everyday,and all the programs he watched is my most hate program.My grandfather is a curious old man.I don’t know what he thinks.When we not want sleep he slept,when we want sleep or

答案

我想楼主的英语能力还是初中水平吧,至少比我好多了.里面看不出有什么高级词汇.都是简单的主谓宾结构.希望楼主多灵活运用些高级词汇,这样对你的写作能力和得分会有很大的提高,句式不要太单调,这样评卷老师会对你有很高的印象的,虽然我看不出你的作品有什么错误的地方,大体的意思我还是可以了解的,希望继续努力,中国未来的外交官助手.