帮我改英文作文,语法错误请说出为什么谢谢.

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帮我改英文作文,语法错误请说出为什么谢谢.
In recent years, more and more people try their best to take care of their families.Many people think if they live in the countryside, they will take care of their families better. But in my opinion, People live in urban areas can take better care of their families than people live in rural areas.
First of all, people who live in city have convenient living environment.
As you know, we all need heath. A lot of people died from bad traffic. Because they lived in countryside they didn't have enough time to saved themselves. As you know time pay a vital role in our life. In the urban areas we have so convenient traffic that we can save more time to save many people. By the way, in citys we have advancing medicine instruments and lots of amusement parks. It makes our life heath and colorful.
For instance, My friend named Ann who live in city. three moths ago her father heart attack, she called hospital and two minutes later the ambulance went to their home and her father be saved. The doctor said if her father have several minutes later, he would die. So people live in urban areas can better take care of their families than people who live in countryside.
Finally I think the better choice of which areas to live in urban regions,which is benefical to all our family members.
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In recent years,more and more people try their best to take care of their families.Many people think if they live in the countryside,they will take care of their families better.But in my opinion,People live in urban areas can take better care of their families than people live in rural areas can（1）.
First of all,people who live in cities（2） have convenient living environment.
As you know,we all need health（3）.A lot of people died from bad traffic.Because they lived in countryside and（4) they didn't have enough time to save（5） themselves.As you know ,（6）time play（7） a vital role in our life.In the urban areas we have so convenient traffic that we can save more time to save many people.By the way,in citys we have advancing medicine instruments and lots of amusement parks.It makes our life healthy(7) and colorful.
For instance,My friend named Ann lived in city.Three moths ago her father heart attacked(8),she called first-aid(9) and two minutes later ,the ambulance went to their home and her father was(10) saved.The doctor said if her father had had (12)several minutes later,he would have died(11).So people live in urban areas can better take care of their families than people who live in countryside.
Finally I think the better choice of which areas to live is(17) urban regions,which is benefical to all our family members.