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My unforgettable trip
初二（5）班 吴宁然
On July 2008,I went to England with my mother to see my father.He was studied there.We went to many interesting places.
First I visited the small town we lived.It’s not as big as Zibo.But it’s beautiful.We bought many things,such as telephone card,food,clothes,and so on.Next we went to Cambridge and Oxford.It’s bigger than any school in China.Then we went to London.It’s the capital of England.We saw many old buildings,such as the Big Ben,the Tower Bridge.There are many new buildings,the London Eye and soon on.At last I visited the Birmingham,and saw the Atlantic Ocean.But we didn’t swim,because the weather was cold.I think there isn’t any different between the Atlantic Ocean and the Pacific Ocean.
And I found one interesting:In England it’s warm and humid in summer.The temperature is about 15℃~20℃.It rained continually.It’s a good place to spend the summer holiday for Chinese people.
I think my trip was fantastic.I enjoy

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总的来说,写的不错.但有一些地方需要修改：On July 2008 改为 In July 2008 He was studied there 改为 He was studying there,and so on 去掉前面的逗号the Birmingham 不用加thethere isn’t any different differ...