帮我改改托福作文题目如下：

题目

帮我改改托福作文题目如下：
Some people like to travel alone,other like to travel together with several friends.Which do you prefer,Why?
Actually,I usually travel with some friends.Cause ,no matter how strong or smart a person are.He can not thought about every corn.
But sometimes,a small mistake could make different.Form the most trouble in the history,lots of guy just believe himself too mach.
At last,lead to a big problem and can not make it back.
Traveling outside oneself,maybe seems cool to hear other people talk about this,and it's a truth that oneself maybe more freedom
and less slowly.But,with some friends also have some advantages.Such as,friends could help you leading the way and it's help a lot.
Maybe,he could get your heavy bag when you are nearly fall down.And in lots of situation I'd like to get friends to share the best view in
traveling and the painful things.
Now,people become more and more care about the ability of a person deal with the celebration between boss and friends in works.And I think
it's the best way to prove and make it better.Cause you must let everyone in your team happy to travel with you,and know you are the one that nobody
could take in.
In a words,a person should travel with other not alone.Cause a person couldn't live alone in this world.

答案

Actually, I usually travel with some friends. Cause , no matter how strong or smart a person are. He can not thought about every corn.----------不能用cause,你要用because.
But sometimes, a small mistake could make different. Form the most trouble in the history, lots of guy just believe himself too mach.（不知道你在说什么.）
At last, lead to a big problem and can not make it back. （你第一第二点都没说,怎么就last的观点了?）
Traveling outside oneself, maybe seems cool to hear other people talk about this, and it's a truth that oneself maybe more freedom and less slowly. ----------- 改为“Lots of people think Traveling outside oneself is cool and is one of the ways of searching for freedom.
But, with some friends also have some advantages. Such as, friends could help you leading the way and it's help a lot. "It helps a lot"; such as的用法不是这样子的.
Maybe, he could get your heavy bag when you are nearly fall down. And in lots of situation I'd like to get friends to share the best view in traveling and the painful things._____ ” the saying that "A friend in need is a friend indeed" is quite true when you are on travelling. when you have too many baggages to carry, a travel partner is the right one to help you“
Now, people become more and more care about the ability of a person deal with the celebration between boss and friends in works. 语病
And I think it's the best way to prove and make it better. Cause you must let everyone in your team happy to travel with you, and know you are the one that nobody could take in.
In a words（word）, a person should travel with other（others）but not alone. Cause a person couldn't live alone in this world.（结尾段多写点.）
首先,楼主,你只有222个字,太少了,which说明你的作文最多22分.
2nd,你开头至少用些废话介绍一下travel的背景,意义,趋势什么的.用70words的样子.
3rd,有不下6处错误,而且都比较大.最好能够纠正了.
4th,只把一些错误弄出来改了.
finally,楼主,你have a long long way to go. 加油哦,给你一篇范文.
Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

If you were to travel, would you want to be with a companion or alone? Some might say they would want to travel alone. However, I have an opposite opinion. I think it is better to travel with a companion for the following reasons. A good travel partner can give us information about the place, and we won’t feel bored if we travel together, and also we can have opportunities to meet more people through a companion.
People travel around some places to get information about the specific areas. To get the information about the place, we need a guide. If we hire a guide, we should pay money and we will somewhat not be free to go anywhere. Despite that, if we travel with friends, they could tell us about it as a guide. We can save money and get some information about the place that we visit. In addition, we could be free to go anywhere we want.
As to the second point, if we travel with friends, we wouldn’t fell tedious while traveling. We can talk to each other and get chances to know each other more. On the other hand, traveling alone could make us feel down because it is quite boring to hang around by themselves. Thus, I would prefer traveling with a companion to alone.
Besides, the second point, if we travel with a companion, we can get more opportunities to meet other people through my friends. For example, when I was 10 years old, I went to china. I have met a lot of people through my friend there and I’m still keeping in touch with them. If I didn’t go to china with my friend, I could have not met them in my life. This is the final reason why I think it is better to travel with friends rather alone.
To conclude, some people might say it is better to travel alone because it might interrupt us if we travel with a companion. Nevertheless, I think it would be better to travel with a companion for the previous reasons, they can tell us some information about the place, we can enjoy more because it’s not boring, and we could get opportunities to meet many people through friends.