请高手帮忙改改我英语作文中的错误,

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请高手帮忙改改我英语作文中的错误,
If I were a boy
I wish I were a boy!
I still remembered that when I was a child,my parents ofter said to me “How I wish you were a boy.” Because if I were a boy,my father would not have lost his job,my family would be a good family.
Were I a boy,I would try my best to learn knowledge as much as possible.Because in order to support the family,parents try their best to work hard.I want to let them live a happy life.
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If only I were a boy!
If I were a boy,I would help the girls who need help.
If I were a boy,I would take good care of my love and protect she.
If I were a boy,I would take good care of my parents and my little sister/ brother.
If I were a boy,I would…
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Today,I would rather I had a job.
If I had a job now,I would make much money.However,I am studying in the college.To be frank,I would rather I had a job.Because I think if were at work,I also can get much experience and knowledge.I think it will be make me

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If I were a boy
I wish I were a boy!
I still remembered that when I was a child,my parents ofter（一般后面加现在时,used to） said to me “How I wish you were a boy.” Because if I were a boy,my father would not have lost his job,my family would be a good family.
（If I was,将were I删去）Were I a boy,I would（缩写成I’d会更好） try my best（也可用I’ll spare no effort） to learn knowledge as much as possible.Because in order to（删去in order to,I want/hope）to support the family,parents try（不是过去时吗,tried） their best to work hard.（好像不符语意吧,parents worked so hard that they were too exhausted to enjoy their life and）I want to let them live a happy life.
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If only I were a boy!
If I were a boy,I would help the girls who need help.
If I were a boy,I would take good care of my love（lover） and protect she（her）.
If I were a boy,I would take good care of my parents and my little sister/ brother.
If I were a boy,I would…
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Today,I would rather I had a job.
If I had a job now,I would make much（a lot of） money.However,I am studying in the college.To be frank,I would rather I had a job.Because I think if（I） were at work,I also can get much experience and knowledge.I think it will be make me more wonderful.To be the truth,I am very regret to study here.If I had not choose（if I didn’t make a choice）to study here,I think I would be happy now.In addition,If I were rich,I would buy a house for（to,此为固定搭配!） my parents.I want to live a life of ease（want to后面改为live a easy life） and make（let） people around me have a good life.In all,I will try my best exertions（好累赘~删去吧） to study and I can（will比较符合语法规则） find a good job.