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Agree or disagree:when relaxing,some people like to spend time alone
Nowadays,people usually busy in their work or study.After that,when they relaxing,some people would like spend their time alone.One the contrary,other people would like to spend with their friends or family.As far as I am concern,I’m prefer to spend time alone than with other people when I relaxing.Thus,I’m quite agree the statement.
On the one hand,after a tired working day,spending time alone is a good way for people to relax themselves.Take my mother for example,everyday she needs to work at least ten hours,managing the factory almost make her fagged,and she needs cook dinner to me after go home.When she can have a rest,she invariably spend time alone,listening some music or watching TV,which can make she feel comfortable and serene.Therefore,the high-demanding work never affects my mother’s health.
On the other hand,when you are relaxing,if you spend time with others like your friend,i

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Nowadays,people usually busy in their work or study.缺动词 be busywhen they relaxing 又缺动词After that,when they relaxing,some people would like spend their time alone.One the contrary,other people w...