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请帮我检查一下我的这篇英语作文.如果发现错误,请指出并帮忙改正.
假如你的英国笔友Peter来信说寒假要来中国旅游,希望你能回信给一些吃喝玩乐以及游览名胜古迹的攻略.
DearPeter:
I’m very glad that you will come to China in thewinter holiday,and it’s my honor to tell you somewhere good to visit in ourcountry.
Beijing has many historic spotsand interest places.Have you ever heard of “he who doesn't reach the Great Wallis not a true man”?I think you may have.So,I suggest that you can go andvisit the Great Wall.When you climb on the Great Wall,you will find that itis like a dragon,and you can feast your eyes on the beautiful scene.You’dbetter bring some food and water,because the long walk may make you tired.Whenyou’re hungry,you can go to the nearest restaurant.
In the afternoon,you can visit the Tian'anmen Square.In the other days,you can go to other famous place,such as the Imperial Palace.
Yours,
William

答案

you will come to - you are coming to
historic spots and interest places - historic and interesting places 
I suggest that you can go and vist - I suggest that you(should) go visit
When you climb on the Great wall - When you are climbing up the Great wall
In the other days - on the following days
other famous place - other famous places


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