姐姐,我又来了,能在帮我改篇考研英语小作文吗?

题目

姐姐,我又来了,能在帮我改篇考研英语小作文吗?
（有语法错误,麻烦您给我指出来,谢谢）这是13年英语1的小作文,受累!
Direction:
Write an e-mail of about 100 words to a foreign teacher in your college,inviting him/her to be a judge for the upcoming English speech contest.
You should include the details you think necessary
Dear Professor Bob,
I am so glad to inform you that our university will organize an English speech contest on January 8-9 in our campus.You are cordially invited to participate in this contest to be our judge.
Now,let me introduce the detail information about the speech contest to you.Firstly,there are 50 students take part in the activity and they come from every department of our university.Secondly,the won student will achieve 5000 yuan scholarship.Thirdly,every judge’s meal and accommodation expenses will be subsidized.
If you accept our invitation,you can email us via 1234@.com as soon as possible.So that we can make necessary arrangement.I look forward to seeing you in the activity.

答案

我想先说一个小问题,你这篇文章后面的内容稍微要做出改动,你应该着重介绍这个比赛的目的 目标之类的 按你说的这些 费用什么的 我个人认为是不必要的,所以 你能不能先自己改一下内容 我再给你检查语法?
说 某某教授 要用姓,Bob是名,不能这么用的