受累,姐姐,再帮我改改这篇考研英语小作文

题目

受累,姐姐,再帮我改改这篇考研英语小作文
这是13年英语1的小作文
Direction:
Write an e-mail of about 100 words to a foreign teacher in your college,inviting him/her to be a judge for the upcoming English speech contest.
You should include the details you think necessary
Dear Professor Smith,
I am so glad to inform you that our university will organize an English speech contest on January 8-9 in our campus.You are cordially invited to participate in this contest to be our judge.
Now,let me introduce the detail information about the English speech contest to you.Firstly,the object of the contest is to improve our the level of proficiency in English.Secondly,there are 50 students take part in the activity and they come from every department of our university.Thirdly,every contestant will have 30 minutes for speaking .
If you accept our invitation,you can email us via 1234@.com as soon as possible.So that we can make necessary arrangement.I look forward to seeing you in the activity.
Yours sincerely,
Ling Ming

答案

Dear Professor Smith,
I am writing to invite you to be a judge for the English speech contest which will be held in our university from January 8 to 9..
Now,let me introduce the detailed information about the contest to you.Firstly,the aim of the contest is to improve our English proficiency.Secondly,we all know that you are an experienced teacher ,we believe that you can offer us some valuable suggestions.What's more,50 students who come from every department of our university will take part in the activity .Each of them will have 3 minutes to make a speech.
It would be a great honor if you could accept our invitation.We are looking forward to your favorable reply at your earliest convenience.
Yours sincerely,
Ling Ming