修改英文信件病句

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修改英文信件病句
让文章更加流利和通顺.还有如果有更好的词汇代替文章中一些词句会更好.
To whom it may concern,
I am US citizen Min Zhang,I request to apply for my fiancé YongFei Li to come to United States and live with me.I was born in Fujian,China.I immigrated to United States of America at September 8th,2001.As result of traditional Chinese culture’s influence,my parents hoped that I have a good future.They hoped that I can find a good husband and start my own family.The acquaintance of my fiancé and me was through a relative’s introduction.At the end of January 2008,my parents went back to China for Chinese New Year celebration.During that time,my aunt AiJing Zhang had mentioned this guy YongFei Li,which is son of her best friend.Afterward,my parents met this young fellow couple times,and knowing about his family background and job position.They had very good impression about him.YongFei Li is four years older than me.His occupation is a business manager.He has good family background.After my parents return back to United States,they mentioned YongFei Li to me and ask me to consider start relationship with him.At the beginning,I thought that it wasn’t a bad idea to meet new friends.We started chatting online and had phone conservations as friends.I have eventually discovered that there’s something special about him.We have common hobbies and interests,we both enjoy travel,music and movies.We always have endless topics.Although we are separated from the ocean banks but our hearts are very close.We started have feeling toward each other and our relationship had subtle change.We were fall in love and he became my boyfriend.
After 3 month-long relationship,I couldn’t wait see him.Therefore,I arrived at Fujian,China in June 10th,2008 and saw him.During my stay in China,I and YongFei travelled to many places together.Including Suzhou,Hangzhou,Shanghai,Nanjing,Xiamen and Wuxi.I had great times with him; it was the happiest experience in my life that I will never forget.He’s a very caring person.I enjoy the happy time that we spent together.More importantly,I can feel his love toward me is strong and faithful.Our love is growing to be mature and firm.After realizing that both of us cannot be separated from each other,two of us had an official engagement in this special day August,2008 8 (Beijing Olympic Games opening day) under bilateral parents' support.The grand engagement ceremony was held according to the local custom.
I,Zhang Min,take an oath here.All I have stated above is true.I and my fiancé’s marriage is real.I promise that we will get marry within 90 days after he gets a Visa and come to United States of America.
Sincerely,
Min Zhang

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