请给这篇雅思作文打分.

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请给这篇雅思作文打分.
In the present age,international aids are playing increasingly important roles in certain poorer countries’s progress.But in the meantimes,whether giving aids to poorer countires has more adverse impact than positive impacts has sparked much dabate.Some people assert that aids to poorer cuontries may cause more troubles of those area.Personally,I think their view is overly simplistic.
Convincing arguments can be made that aids to developing countris may bring the locals numerous benefits.To start with,fanancial aid is one of the direct means to help the area where has the shortage of money.Therefore,with this help,many industries can carry out subjests s,such as construction,business trades,and so on.Moreover,international aid help those people in educational way.Specifically,there are a host of non government organizations building schools there and providing a wide range of shooling,so that many children are really benefit from them.L astly,advanced health care se

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5分到5.5分.In the present age有这个词么?接着international aids are playing increasingly important roles 非常的差劲,完全的汉语式英文 再是poorer…… 我有点无语了 雅思写作不是随便的拿个字典查查就能写出来...